Monday, August 20, 2007

daybreak


Saint Petersburg docks
to the sound of a brass band
morning breaks


words & photo © gerald england, 2007

in response to the "daybreak" theme at One Deep Breath.

More photos can be seen at Cruise 2006 and at Baltic 2006

14 comments:

  1. Ackworth born haiku
    in the links of hpy blog
    today done

    I'm so sorry, I don't know anything about the haiku art, so I just tried to do it my way.

    I was actually wondering how to write a haiku post some day when I suddenly noticed that I was in your links. Thank you very much.

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  2. I just read the haiku should be in the form 5 - 7 - 5 and that a word for a season should be used. For the latter one I have today, but the 5 -7 - 5 is not really respected.
    I could / should have written

    Ackworth born haiku (5)
    In the links of hpy blog (7 if you pronounce happy)
    today has been done (5)


    The punctuation is not perfect, but I'm a beginner.

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  3. hi happy
    don't get hung up on
    counting syllables

    5-7-5 really only applies to Japanese haiku but Japanese syllables [actually "onji"] are different from the syllables in most western languages in that they are all of equal length so 17 English syllables are generally a lot more than 17 Japanese onji.

    haiku appear simple but mastery of the genre takes upwards of 30 years. Don't let that put you off trying and enjoying though.

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  4. Dark the sky is,
    Cold wind in the trees blows hard.
    Reply gives warmth.

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  5. good attempt

    I could analyse the verse in many different ways but this is probably not the forum for too much analysis.

    suffice to say that
    the word "is" is probably redundant [ie it goes without saying] and there is perhaps too much going on in the second line with the wind - cold, blowing, hard - maybe one or more of these states could be implied somewhere else somehow.

    keep reading widely

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  6. What a wonderful way to herald in the new morning!
    :)

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  7. Neat photo. I missed the meteor shower too! Too cloudy and/or artificially bright here, I think. Sorry to hear you were battling flu. Are you feeling better? This weekend I saw that a tiny toad had taken up residence in our pink birdhouse, so I will be blogging about that later today. Stay tuned ... such excitement! :-)

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  8. An entirely new take on daybreak - at least for me! I truly enjoyed the photo and the new thoughts engendered by your words...

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  9. this reminds me of two movies...Dear Frankie and On a Clear Day...very nice work

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  10. What a different take on what daybreak means. Once or twice, I'd enjoy it.

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  11. well, that would certainly wake you up! lol.

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